Yes, Jennifer is still alive.
No, her manuscript is not quite ready for the Baker’s Dozen Auction yet.
But it will be!
Meanwhile, the Baker’s Dozen logline critique rounds have begun. Check them out here to provide aspiring authors with your valuable feedback. My logline was entry number #11. Thanks to all who commented.
If you’re not sure how to write a log line (like me!), check out this very helpful article on Query Tracker. I’ve been using their seven questions, and the Baker’s Dozen critique feedback, to revamp my logline.
- What genre is the book?
YA Urban Fantasy
- Who is the main character?
- What makes her unique?
She can re-live her eighteenth year over and over
- What is the inciting incident?
a) Her mentor is captured by tarot thieves
b) Princess destroys her cousin Tami’s tarot cards, leaving her with less than a year to live
- What is your main character’s goal?
a) Determine who the tarot thief is and stop him
b) Steal Princess’s boyfriend and opal to avenge Tami
- What is the major conflict your character will face? Unlike in the query, you only have room for one conflict in the logline.
a) Tarot thieves hunt her to steal her cards
b) Attracting a guy and breaking into a bank
- What is the consequence if the main character fails?
a) She and her cousin both die
b) She and her cousin both go to jail, or die
You tell me: Which new and improved logline do you prefer?
Toria has re-lived her eighteenth year as fifty different aliases, conning her way around the globe. After her mentor is captured, a mysterious tarot thief in Seville hunts Toria. She must protect her magical tarot cards, which contain her remaining years of life, until she can identify and stop the tarot thief.
Toria has re-lived her eighteenth year as fifty different aliases, conning her way around the globe. After a vicious bully destroys all her cousin Tami’s magical tarot cards, the girl has less than a year to live. Toria agrees to avenge her cousin by stealing the bully’s two most prized possessions: her boyfriend and a priceless black opal locked in a bank vault.